 CommentsDevious Comments Wow, thank you! That's the first critique I've gotten, and probably the most honest comment I've EVER gotten. Thank you for that.
I would like to try to redraw this. I have heard of the horizon line, though I didn't think much of it while I was doing this. It was drawn in patches, in large part sitting waiting on meals at IHOP or dinner break at work. The floor tiles were an afterthought, I think when I redraw it I'll try to incorporate much more detail into the picture. As for human reference, I'm terrible. Thank you for the points you shared on that, I'll be working on another version of this when I have the time. If I remember, I'll drop you a line.  Again, thanks for the honesty.  --  You need chaos in your soul to give birth to a dancing star. Friedrich Nietzsche best emote EVER ->  You Are Lovely. Pass It On: [link]  |
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What I like most about this picture is the expression on the girls face. It shows fear and struggle.
Everything else is a work in progress.
First, I'll talk about the figure itself. The main figure has no proportions whatsoever; arms that are too long, and legs that are too short. You asked if the ribs looked okay. Honestly, my first response to that was that they look for like a lump on her stomach. I think that if her hips were a little wider, the ribcage would look better, but as it is, it just looks sloppy. Also, the shoulder is too far back on her body. With all her weight being pushed forward toward the mirror, the shoulder would be more forward, and her back would line up with her neck.
Moving on to the perspective:
The floor pattern and the angle of the walls does not match up all that well, but I do like how you at least made the floor tiles that were farther away a little smaller. And from this angle, the pole along the wall would not be parallel to the floor. Have you ever heard of the "horizon line" when drawing? It really helps with the perspective of buildings and structures. The only other thing I would mention about perspective is her reflection in the mirror. Mirrors give an exact opposite reflection of what is before them, so her feet shouldn't be at the bottom of the mirror, but more along the same distance from it as the actual girls feet are. And the floor tiles should also be reflected, even if you made them look warped to go with the shadow girl.
I would say that you should do some figure sketches or gesture drawings to get used to the proportions of the human figure.
If you need any visual references on the human figure, or "horizon lines" don't be afraid to ask me. I may not be a fantastic artist myself, but I know/can help with the basics.
I would love to see this picture re-drawn after some more improvement in drawing techniques. It has real potential, and so do you. I hope that nothing I've said has sounded offensive to you.